How Your Birth Order Influences Your
Life Adjustment
In the
article, “How Your Birth Order Influences Your Life Adjustment,” the author,
Lucille Forer writes how people’s birth order influences people’s characters.
The author says that other family members’ expectations toward each child
according to their birth order decide their roles in their family, and the
roles become part of his/her self-concept. I agree with author’s idea that “Birth
order influences him to develop certain attitudes toward other people and helps
him develops specific patterns of behavior.”
I have two sisters
back in my country, Japan, and I am a middle child. Each character or behavior
exactly represent typical birth other characteristic. My elder sister is very
responsible. My younger sister knows there are others around to take care of
her. As the writer say that expectation of certain behavior toward him/her
depends on each birth order develops their part of self-concept, we all expect
certain roles toward each sibling. My parents have expected my elder sister to
take care of me and my younger sister since I was born. She took me with her
when she play with her friends, and took care of my study and homework in our
childhood. She is a very responsible woman because she has been raised to be
responsible by my parents’ expectation.
My younger
sister has been taken care of well by all our family members. She is our family’s
mood maker. Everybody loves her. We are all willing to take care of her because
of her certain attitude. Her attitude or behavior make us think that she is
less able to do things than us, so we take care of her, even she is the real
smartest in our sibling. My younger sister is now 29 years old, she is fully
grown woman; however, her attitude and behavior still represents that she is a
baby one in my family. It is because we also still expect her to do so.
In my
country, japan, people think that blood type also determines certain behavior
in part of our characteristics. We sometimes guess people’s blood type by
observing their behavior, and it actually works. However, I read an article,
and it says that we develop our certain behavior depending on blood type
because we learn and act what characteristic we have according to our blood
type from our childhood. Other words, information of blood type characteristics
develop our self-concept.
We have acted
certain roles according to other’s expectation from in our childhood. If you
have acted certain role from your childhood, it becomes part of your real
characteristic. Birth order influences people’s characteristics with other
expectation.
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ReplyDeleteI am Anna. I am going to tell you how your essay is. You did a good job with the summary. But you didn't explain much on thesis. You have to explain your opinion of why do you agree with Lucille. Your body paragraphs is okay, however, you didn't give evidence in the second body paragraph. For downshifting, I would say a level 3 because you didn't give when and what day. The third paragraph, it has nothing to do with what it says from the story. They never mentioned about blood type. In the real test, you can not add a paragraph that is not from the story. The second paragraph has a good structure. But you need to work on the thesis on the first paragraph because one of the most important one for the essay. I hope my advice helps. See Ya!
This essay does a good job offering a summary of the article. From reading the introductory paragraph I got a brief understanding of what the article was about. Akiko also included a thesis statement.
ReplyDeleteI really like how the first body paragraph was worded and structured. I would give this paragraph a level 4. She gave good details about how both of her siblings, and herself, each played different roles growing up. She gave a good example about the past when her older sister would take her outside along with her and her friends. “She took me with her when she play with her friends, and took care of my study and homework in our childhood.” Also, she spoke about how responsible her sister was towards them due to the expectations of her parents.
I would give the second body paragraph in between a 2-3. The information seems a little general and could have been stretched out some more or she could’ve used an example of a movie or television show she has seen. Overall, the examples she gave about her younger sister having that attitude where she still needs a care giver were good.
The third body paragraph I would give a 3. It is also general, however, she gives a good example of how they determine one’s certain behavior and characteristics by guessing their blood type in her country. As well as reading it in an article.
There is a good essay structure in this essay. The conclusion sums up her whole idea of how your birth order influences your behavior and characteristics. The thesis is well supported by the evidence Akiko provided in her essay.
I think another explanation is that not always the oldest chield has the hierarchy to do everything, sometimes the middle child is the one thata has better decision when parents are around, while when your the only child everyone is focus on you and the decisions you have to make. This site helps me to write my papers on this theme.
ReplyDeletei assume AKI can't write at all.
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